VivaLebowski

Theres simply no reason to think that native boy is on requim considering how Forerunner stuff is scattered all over the Milky Way, including Earth. I'm just looking forward to the Forerunners being bad. Even though they build cool stuff, they sound like A-holes to me, and the Didact has a motivation to destroy Humanity since Humans are the ones who were supposed to inherent the Precursors mantle...not the Forerunners. So, dat b!tch be jealous.

Read in full. With regards to your concept or your plot I can't really say how good or interesting it is considering I only know what is in the first chapter That said, I can give you a few pointers with regards to the nitty gritty of the writing itself. The thing is, aside from basic grammatical and spelling errors much of the advice I'm gonna give you is subjective, to a certain degree, so you can take it or leave it. These are just examples of way you can improve the flow of what your writing, AKA "Prose style". If you want a full complete edit, where I simply post what I think needs to be changed on every single sentence, let me know in this thread or a PM and I will PM it back to you with comments on every single thing that needs to be changed. 1) Theres a few sentences which don't make sense: *"What came to be is something that I couldn’t have never imagined.". I think this should read "What came to be is something I could have never imagined." or "What came to be is something I couldn't have ever imagined." Couldn't never is redundant. *Another sentence like this is "It was a steel, the handle being fool’s gold with her name carved into it, “Carolina”.". This should probably be "It was Steel," or "It was made of Steel", not it was a steel. You could, technically talk like that. I might say of a wrist watch, "It was a gold," for instance, but nontheless, this sentence forces the read to pause and put more thought into deciphering the sentence than he/she should, which is what you want to avoid. Remember, its just fine for the reader to have to make certain connections by themselves, or to figure out who is speaking or what exactly is happening based on the context. But you ALWAYS want to avoid them losing information in simply deciphering your sentence. *"I yelled toward the direction which the boar ran away from." This should be "I yelled in the direction the boar ran". First off, you never yell toward a direction. I don't drive toward North. Once again, it sorta makes sense, but its bad word choice. Also, I'm assuming you meant the direction the boar is running in, not the direction its running from, since the narrator would be yelling at the boar. 2) Theres a few parts where better punctuation is needed. Remember that when the reader reads your material, the punctuation isnt just there for them to seperate stuff out in their mind, or to tell rather someone is angry or asking a question...the punctuation sets the tempo for how they read, kinda like a beat or a speed of reading, if you wanna think about it like that. They can still read and make sense of what your saying if this tempo is off, but reading becomes a chore if that tempo isn't there. *For example, " Eventually I found a wild boar, the instant I saw it, I became stone-like. " This sentence makes perfect sense, but its more difficult to read beacuse its all one sentence. It becomes easier to read if its "Eventually I found a wild boar. The instant I saw it, I became stone-like." Notice I changed the first comma for a period, giving the reader a short but noticable pause which helps their brain better decipher the sentence. 3) Theres a few sentences which are just kinda hard to read, not beacuse they don't make sense as with #1, but beacuse they are just structured poorly. *For example, "To be the son of a king my whole life and to suddenly know at the age of 16 never seemed possible." I know what you mean by this sentence, it just takes a few re readings to figure it out. Its unclear what your saying never seemed possible...was it, "being the son of a king never seemed possible" or was it "to suddenly know that never seemed possible". Beacuse you have an and there, its unclear what your identifying as "never seeming possible". I would suggest saying "To have been the son of a king my whole life, to have never known it, that seemed impossible. But I found out at 16" OR "To have been the son of a king my whole life and to have only found out at 16... It had never seemed possible." One thing about this sentence is that even though the narrator IS the son of a king in the present, so using the word be makes sense, its still better Prose style to use the past tense, been, beacuse the narrator is thinking about the past. 4) There are quite a few grammatical errors as well.

I used to think these jokes weren't funny...but then everything changed when the Fire Nation attacked.

The biggest thing I took away from this is how much better this forgeworld looks than Reach's. If Halo 4 forge has three of these big maps, as opposed to one Super big map, that means we can actually get some variety in the forge made maps, as opposed to Reach, where every last forgeworld map is a mix of grey structure, green grass, and blue water, time after time after time.

I'm not one for authoritarianism when it comes to most things, but I hope this means the mods will be banning fools left and right. We need it. Yall go way too soft on people. It encourages the trolls.

Man, celebrating 200 posts is like celebrating Elementary School graduation Okay maybe not. Ehh, sorta...I'm not sure. Anyway, congratz good sir.

So does the merging of Single and Multi player just mean that when I hit "Single Player" its connecting me to a special server mojang has set up?

Ha. Ha. Ha. Haha. And Ha. Inferior. Why is this thread still active? What are we celebrating? A hasbeen Aussie MoM? Dis be bull$h!t

"This last image was for a concept in which an ancient technology sitting undisturbed for eons is finally discovered by a young native boy. " This caption was below that pick. Indicates to me that this is probably something occuring on Earth. Moreover, the object that the boy is reaching towards is not the Infinity. It does not resemble it in size, shape or style.

ODST's always felt much more interesting and Human than Spartans...one of the things which made ODST a success for me was that even though it only had a little characterization, it went so far. They weren't faceless, stoic superhumans like Noble team, they were actually interesting guys.

I think the troll was successfull.

ELITES ARE BEATIFULL ANIMALS! WHAT ARE YOU? APES! YOUR NOTHING BUT APES THAT THINK THEY GREW UP! But...oh no...you didn't grow up. You've got War and Poverty and effing Justin Bieber and ELITES ARE THE UGLY ONES? Oh, Okay. Lets compare shall we? Oh...Adolf Hitler, Lady Gaga, Mao Tse Tung, The Director, Canned Bread, Nuclear Weapons, Azaxx, Dirty syringes...I could go on? And what do Elites have? Oh...just a big ass f******* laser that will melt your whole planet.

Okay, hold on a second while I prep this. Is it ready Johnny? Yeah...okay Johnny says its ready. Hit it. Allright, 3...2...1. Yup, theres the Fireworks. Welcome back AD. Now we get to see what all the talk was about. You have a reputation to live up to sir!

You know that Marine that yells "Im a cowardly fool?" in Halo 1? Yeah. Thats me.

My team was, is, and shall remain the xXxAlfaDawgsxXx. That was right after I left the PuffDahCronic789's. But really...Red. Beacuse Blue is for pansies. The men...not the flower.

You gotta click it the box to get the full effect gents, in case anyones confused. But yeah, I liked it. seems high quality. Guaranteed to make forum arguments funnier. Heres my official seal of approval. ----> *BLAM!*

Actually, does anyone know how the hell those things work? I'm thinking its like a chest inventory but you can access it wherever you go as long as you put a chest...but how much storage space does this one inter dimensional chest have?

Welcome to the silver leagues good sir, we are moving up in life arent we? And way to keep it classy for your announcement

Well, I for one, don't give two sh...I mean, of course I care! Actually, in all seriousness, we hardly know you good sir. Post some more, and your exploits shall become LEGENDARY!

I espiecally appreciated the self deprecating tags, Twin. I shall always have fond (or perhaps, not so fond memories?) of that argument we had when I was a newer member....I ain't going to say I didn't have my reasons, but I do think I took it way too far. Since then, its nice to see someone who doesn't hold grudges. You were'nt the first and will not be the last respected member who does something stupid and leaves, though I hope it is temporary in your case. God only knows who much we need someone who actually knows what they are talking about (when it comes to tech ) in a forum like this. Here's to the good times you had and hoping for your return in the future. Stay classy. But don't stop cursing. Its a distinct element of your character.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Gu86_bZAvXM&feature=related Who can top Christopher Walkin?

Dont you mean it is the best when your not in creative? Having to work for stuff makes everything you build that much more special. And beware of Herobrine, gents. If you see him, make sure to snap a pic.

Ahh, I see these chumps making posts for reaching 250 posts. I was like....guuurrrrllll watch'you doing. But 2000 posts? Thats the real deal right there. Congratz to you, Mr.Bullet. And might I say that you are one of our most valueble members in terms of enforcing the rules. Also, thanks for the mention at the end of that list. I will always be last...but never least Forum vets, moderators, dedicated members leave...but new people rise up, and some of our best members stay and keep it classy. Here's to more good times.

Very much looking forward to this...particularly having a new ore to look for. Will probably get my friends togethor and start a new server for this. In addition, beware of Herobrine.

Thats not a sin, thats a just war. If I might ask intercession on behalf of my friend. My other friend, whos rather odd, builds absolutely gigantic rectangular buildings in Minecraft. My other friend, the sinner, simply covered his entire house with TNT for no reason and blew it up. Afterwards, he filled in the crater with water.