BraverKING514 Posted November 24, 2011 Report Share Posted November 24, 2011 It's Spartan Augmentations. S-II. Interesting, choice of words was... good. Paragraphs. Decent sizes. Honestly though. MC has Brown hair, and Brown eyes. And he liked fighting... wasn't a very talkative, nice or person who smiled a lot. He became all of those things later. You aren't born that way, you become it. As far as his hair goes, if you've seen this then you know that those traits can change. (Eye color, maybe hair, he didn't have any) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr Biggles Posted November 24, 2011 Report Share Posted November 24, 2011 this was very possibly, the best thing i have ever seen. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fire Posted November 25, 2011 Author Report Share Posted November 25, 2011 Thanks everyone, my wifi is on the fritz and my dad has been able to sleep well lately, I have a lot of free-time, will work on it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RANMAN10 Posted November 25, 2011 Report Share Posted November 25, 2011 I LOVE YOU. THAT IS ALL. XD Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kurt S-501 Posted November 25, 2011 Report Share Posted November 25, 2011 thanks everyone! (it is pinned btw!) I really need an editor and some pre-readers too. I'd love to help pre-read for you. If you don't have any already. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fire Posted November 25, 2011 Author Report Share Posted November 25, 2011 keep an eye on your inbox! I'd love to help pre-read for you. If you don't have any already. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SGT Warchild Posted November 25, 2011 Report Share Posted November 25, 2011 I know, this is me trying to give him a more human side, and i know it said he had brown hair when he was abducted (6) but i thought maybe it mighta changed. Great detailing, great story, great choice of words, great information, you sir have won 117 medals Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RANMAN10 Posted November 25, 2011 Report Share Posted November 25, 2011 Loll, ya, I don't even like reading but that was cool Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GeordieA17 Posted November 26, 2011 Report Share Posted November 26, 2011 This should be published, great work Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fire Posted November 27, 2011 Author Report Share Posted November 27, 2011 I haven't had any time to work on this, I've got it in my head, I just never have the chance to.. put it into words. Might upload my outline for spectulation Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sarge Posted November 27, 2011 Report Share Posted November 27, 2011 That was awesome truly awesome Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RANMAN10 Posted November 27, 2011 Report Share Posted November 27, 2011 Ya. ...ERIC NYLUN, YOU GOT THE NEXT THING COMIN'!!! XD Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ardent Prayer Posted November 29, 2011 Report Share Posted November 29, 2011 yes this is augmentation process, cassandra is one of the damaged spartans. I already have a plot cooking in my head, even in the actualy canon Cassandra and chief had a thing just like Soren 66 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fire Posted November 30, 2011 Author Report Share Posted November 30, 2011 Yes! exactly, im actually considering having soren be part of the story, they "recover" together for awhile. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RANMAN10 Posted November 30, 2011 Report Share Posted November 30, 2011 SOREN IS SO LEGIT :DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BraverKING514 Posted December 2, 2011 Report Share Posted December 2, 2011 Could you make this into a novel? This would get published and would hit New York Times Bestseller in a heartbeat. You are a gifted author. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
QuinntinteranC Posted December 2, 2011 Report Share Posted December 2, 2011 Great. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fire Posted December 4, 2011 Author Report Share Posted December 4, 2011 Once again, thanks everyone, having trouble continiuning though, writers block you can call it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BraverKING514 Posted December 5, 2011 Report Share Posted December 5, 2011 Just play more Halo. It always helps me finish essays I have to write. Or thats what I keep telling my family... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fire Posted December 6, 2011 Author Report Share Posted December 6, 2011 VERY ROUGH DRAFT OF CHAPTER 1 COMPLETE! ALso guys, no soren, sorry *shrugs* i was going to have a whole nother chapter, might add it later as a flashback, dunno Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fire Posted December 12, 2011 Author Report Share Posted December 12, 2011 WRiters block sucks... 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Doll Posted December 12, 2011 Report Share Posted December 12, 2011 WRiters block sucks... it does, but there are so many ways to get rid of it Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archon Posted December 20, 2011 Report Share Posted December 20, 2011 I know, this is me trying to give him a more human side, and i know it said he had brown hair when he was abducted (6) but i thought maybe it mighta changed. Late Reply: Though his hair hadn't changed, it stayed brown. It showed this in one of those pictures on the Halopedia. He owned 3 ODSTs. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fire Posted February 2, 2012 Author Report Share Posted February 2, 2012 Having trouble continuing,need inspiration! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Doll Posted February 5, 2012 Report Share Posted February 5, 2012 try doing something else, whenever i'm stuck i play video games, watch anime, draw a pic, or write something else, somewhere down the line i get inspired for the next chapter or something....like today, i was playing Tor, then i got a great idea for a picture for my upcomming fic deendents, and when i finished that i figured out what i was going to to for that one part in 'The hands of fate' where i got stuck. seriously though, hardest and longest chapter i have curently written. so just try to do something different. you can't seek insperation, but rather insperation seeks you. you just have to wait lol Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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